User talk:Briancmart2/sandbox
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@Briancmart2, Collinryan, Maribio97, and Thepaopao: Nice work on your draft.
- I'm a little concerned about some parts of the Action in the Brain section. For example
Schizophrenia, as a neural phenomenon, is suspected to be caused by inappropriate activity of NMDA receptors and the related increase in glutamate activity associated with NMDA receptors.
People have suspicions, they don't just float around independently in the ether. So can't use passive voice here - you need to come up with phrasing that presents this in a way that makes it clear to the reader whether this is a mainstream view, a minority view with growing support, or a fringe view. I also recommend that you link to Schizophrenia#Neurological, possibly by adding {{More|Schizophrenia#Neurological}} in wikicode at the top of the Impact on schizophrenia section, which will produce:
- References go after punctuation, not before. Section headers use sentence capitalization, not title capitalization; only the first word of the title, and proper nouns, should be capitalized. Species names, like Rhodotorula gracilis should be italicized. Only proper nouns should be capitalized ("Benzoate" is capitalized at least once).
Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:59, 5 April 2018 (UTC)