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Hypervigilance Article Edits and Sources

Source 1: Lowery-Gionta, E., May, M. D., Taylor, R. M., Bergman, E. M., Etuma, M. T., Jeong, I. H., . . . Moore, N. L. T. (2019). Modeling trauma to develop treatments for posttraumatic stress. Translational Issues in Psychological Science, 5(3), 243-275. doi:http://dx.doi.org.ezproxy3.lhl.uab.edu/10.1037/tps0000199

Hypervigilance appears to be in part caused by dysregulated nervous system, often relating to traumatic events or PTSD. In short term, stress response systems release chemicals that help to protect us from danger, but it appears that in some cases the stress systems become dysregulated and the defense mechanisms designed to protect individuals end up hindering them because the responses are inappropriate for the situation over time. This is where people get stuck in "fight/flight/freeze" long after the traumatic event is over.

Source 2: Phillips, W. J., Fletcher, J. M., Marks, A. D. G., & Hine, D. W. (2016). Thinking styles and decision making: A meta-analysis. Psychological Bulletin, 142(3), 260-290. doi:http://dx.doi.org.ezproxy3.lhl.uab.edu/10.1037/bul0000027

Hypervigilance is associated with negative decision making experiences which generally involve a lack of confidence and trust in your ability to correctly distinguish information that is relevant versus irrelevant because your nervous system is not filtering the information as it normally would

Possible rewrites include indicating how and why hypervigilance differs from the normal nervous system response as well as rewriting parts of the elad section to be more cohesive and flow better.

I added to the article's talk page which was not very active, under the rewrite section. I indicated I planned to add more reliable sources and edit the lead section. I did so, and cited my source, which as of now was all from source 1 as listed above.

Draft of changes: Hypervigilance is when the nervous system is not correctly filtering sensory information and the individual is in an enhanced state of sensory sensitivity. This appears to be linked to a dysregulated nervous system which can often be caused by traumatic events or PTSD. Normally, the nervous system releases stress signals in certain situations as a defense mechanism to protect people from perceived dangers. In some cases, the nervous system becomes chronically dysregulated, causing a release of stress signals that are inappropriate to the situation and create inappropriate and exaggerated responses. (deleting: "an enhanced state of sensory sensitivity accompanied by an exaggerated intensity of behaviors whose purpose is to detect activity" as it is written rather poorly)

Article Evaluation

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This article appears to be very underdeveloped and of a lower quality. There are only 5 references listed for this article, several of which appear unreliable. In the "causes" section, there is only one reference for multiple facts, which is a personal blog source. Two of the other references are to primary sources, individual studies in which there could be publisher bias. Many of the claims in the article are either uncited, or reference back to individual studies rather than medical consensus. Considering this article is about a human health issue, sources that provide medical consensus should be the standard. The article does list the PMID for one reference in the references section.

At the top of the page, multiple issues with the article are highlighted. The need for additional citations as discussed above is noted, as well as the lead section of the article being very short and containing little valuable information. The lead section is only one sentence that provides very poor background and description of the topic and could definitely use improvement.

Most of the sections in the articles contain random facts, rather than overviews of the information, and the facts are connected to unreliable or unsaid sources. It contains viewpoints on possible connections between the topic and "elderly people" with unreliable sources to back up the information.

The stance of the article itself seems neutral and does not appear to aim to influence opinion in any sort of way. It does not appear biased. There is not much information in the article that can distract from the topic.

Overall, this article needs to be rewritten with credible and reliable resources in order to be of a higher quality. If not enough information can be found in sources, the topic may not be notable for Wikipedia yet. All sections, but especially the lead section, need to be updated with a more robust overview of the topic. Descriptions need to be improved and statements that do not connect to a source should be deleted or a reference should be found and cited. All sources are over 10 years old and information may be out of date. In the future, updating the article with more recent and reliable sources would improve it.

--Anna H

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I didn't see an evaluation of an article in your sandbox, so right now you received a zero on that portion of the assignment. Please let me know if you update this for late credit. -- Liz