User contributions for 73.119.161.105

12 August 2017

• 20:3220:32, 12 August 2017 diff hist −237‎ Wainfan Facetmobile ‎ →‎Design and development: Original research. Subjective. Uncited.
• 19:5619:56, 12 August 2017 diff hist +16‎ Marshall Amplification ‎ "Valve" and "tube" are used interchangably in the article without explanation, which is somewhat jargon. Linked "valve" to the same article as "vacuum tube" to give the large population of lay-readers (who don't know they're the same) a bit of a clue.
• 19:5019:50, 12 August 2017 diff hist −28‎ Marshall Amplification ‎ →‎The Plexi and the Marshall stack: Removed ambiguous quotes, paraphrased the passage, and moved it forward for smoother flow.

11 August 2017

• 04:1604:16, 11 August 2017 diff hist −475‎ Firebase ‎ Removed promotional material for and from YC. Supplied ref was merely a company blog which did not support the stated facts (only a vague promotional quote). I.e. unreliable ref. Tag: references removed
• 03:2403:24, 11 August 2017 diff hist −16‎ Skrill ‎ →‎History: extraneous
• 03:2303:23, 11 August 2017 diff hist −237‎ Skrill ‎ →‎WikiLeaks Blockage: After thinking about it, tagged-for-2-years uncited statement was somewhat "Chicken Little"/POV, which could have been fixed, but "free speech activists" is too vague to be kept. If made more specific w/ref, it can be reinstated.
• 03:1403:14, 11 August 2017 diff hist −13‎ Skrill ‎ →‎WikiLeaks controversy: De-escalated tone (descriptive "blockage" vs. vague and slightly melodramatic "controversy"). Removed "worldwide" as somewhat overly melodramatic, especially for an uncited purport (which has been tagged so for 2 years).

10 August 2017

• 20:0620:06, 10 August 2017 diff hist +5‎ Hardware random number generator ‎ →‎Software whitening: "entirely" in surely overstatement (rounded off the absolute edge with "significantly")

8 August 2017

• 22:3322:33, 8 August 2017 diff hist −79‎ 412th Test Wing ‎ →‎USAF flight testing: Removed unencyclopedic melodrama probably copied from from a base brochure.

7 August 2017

• 07:0107:01, 7 August 2017 diff hist 0‎ Sam Shepard ‎ American subject, american spelling. Yes, American theater fans do love to spell it "re" for some reason, but the standard American english is "er". Proper names can spell it any way they want (and remain unchanged).
• 06:5206:52, 7 August 2017 diff hist +12‎ Sam Shepard ‎ →‎Acting: Surley the real person actress wasn't in love with the fictional character Cal!
• 06:2706:27, 7 August 2017 diff hist −5‎ Barry Manilow ‎ Prove it. :-) ("Best" is uncited and almost always and even uncite-able -- it would require a ref to a *current* survey! )
• 06:1806:18, 7 August 2017 diff hist −9‎ Franco-American (brand) ‎ "appears to be" is WP:weasel too (mostly)
• 06:1606:16, 7 August 2017 diff hist −320‎ Franco-American (brand) ‎ WP:OR ("It appears..."), speculation, uncited.

6 August 2017

• 20:3420:34, 6 August 2017 diff hist −2‎ Pinko ‎ →‎Politics: "so-called quotes" are unencyclopedic (they imply a POV, etc.). If it's referring to the way the ref said something, we're supposed to be paraphrasing (not quoting) unless we state up front and cleary that we're quoting the ref.
• 20:2920:29, 6 August 2017 diff hist +2‎ Pinko ‎ →‎Politics: my typo
• 20:2720:27, 6 August 2017 diff hist +16‎ Pinko ‎ →‎Politics: It's generally very difficult to reliably define who coined a word, usually it's said "x first appeared in print in y" or "the first recorded use of x was in y".

4 August 2017

• 07:4507:45, 4 August 2017 diff hist +22‎ Hwasong-7 ‎ →‎Overview: Clarification.
• 07:4207:42, 4 August 2017 diff hist +59‎ Hwasong-7 ‎ →‎Overview: The altitudes mentioned elsewhere in the article are well outside the atmosphere where inherent aerodynamic stability doesn't work a whit. :-) .
• 07:3607:36, 4 August 2017 diff hist −181‎ Hwasong-7 ‎ →‎Overview: Uncited. No basis given for wild WP:OR conclusion that higher loft is harder to intercept and that it's one of the "most effective". The given fact (Patriots intercept below 40km) doesn't support "higher loft is harder" conclusion.
• 07:2707:27, 4 August 2017 diff hist −9‎ Hwasong-7 ‎ →‎Overview: "However" is out of place because statement isn't somewhat-contrary to previous statements.
• 07:2507:25, 4 August 2017 diff hist −77‎ Hwasong-7 ‎ →‎Overview: No basis for WP:OR
• 07:2307:23, 4 August 2017 diff hist −19‎ Hwasong-7 ‎ →‎Overview: Subjective. Also, accuracy can't be known unless the precise target (lat-lon) is known. Source doesn't say "high accuracy.
• 07:1807:18, 4 August 2017 diff hist +12‎ Hwasong-7 ‎ →‎Overview: It's not "guidance" that's not needed because it's stable, it's "active stabiization" that's not needed. Even then, that's only so at lower altitudes where air is dense enough.

2 August 2017

• 21:4121:41, 2 August 2017 diff hist −1,007‎ Capacitor plague ‎ →‎End of the plague: Removed unencyclopdic "woulda-coulda". Speculation about what might have happened. Original Research. Tag: section blanking
• 21:3721:37, 2 August 2017 diff hist −3‎ Capacitor plague ‎ →‎Prevalence: Fixed WP:NOTHOWTO

1 August 2017

• 20:2420:24, 1 August 2017 diff hist +7‎ Yorktown, Virginia ‎ →‎History: split long sentence (two-subject, journalese)
• 20:1320:13, 1 August 2017 diff hist +4‎ Siege of Yorktown ‎ It was a victory in the *American* revolution, so somehow I feel the "American" should be said first here. :-) "Franco-American" sounds too melded-together with something of an emphasis on "Franco".
• 07:1807:18, 1 August 2017 diff hist −33‎ Schweizer SGM 2-37 ‎ →‎Variants: subjective, attempt at dry humor is conversational but not encyclopedic. Not really very notable (low production numbers would lead to low serial numbers as a matter of course)
• 07:1507:15, 1 August 2017 diff hist −10‎ Schweizer SGM 2-37 ‎ →‎Variants: removed extra nonsense words
• 07:1207:12, 1 August 2017 diff hist −19‎ Schweizer SGM 2-37 ‎ →‎Reception: Fixed wrong placement and rendering of USD.
• 07:0107:01, 1 August 2017 diff hist −13‎ Schweizer Aircraft ‎ →‎Sailplanes: "Perhaps" is speculation, "best" is uncitable and uncited (and not really necessary anyway). Plain old "known" does the trick more straightforwardly and encyclopedically. :-) .

27 July 2017

• 17:2617:26, 27 July 2017 diff hist −118‎ Windows Ink ‎ →‎Sketchpad: "Reportedly" is WP:weasel (claim or implication that there's a source tries to bamboozle and hide the fact that there isn't! :-) ).

25 July 2017

• 08:2208:22, 25 July 2017 diff hist −29‎ Firebase ‎ Rmvd "Promotional/Advertizey" tag. I chopped out a lot of the complained-about crapola without intending to rid all of it, but I looked it over afterward and it seems okay now, so I removed the tag. Feel free to put the tag back if you disagree! :-) .
• 08:1508:15, 25 July 2017 diff hist −552‎ Firebase ‎ →‎History: "Begat" after "begat" after "begat" is interesting to the principals, but is extraneous off-topic detail. Trimmed promotional drivel ("vision"). "Announced" is generally needless unencyclopedic melodrama carrying promotional tone.
• 08:0308:03, 25 July 2017 diff hist +2‎ Firebase ‎ →‎History: Minor pronouns, sentence splitting.
• 07:5907:59, 25 July 2017 diff hist −559‎ Firebase ‎ Fixed (some) promotional tone in lede and removed some off-topic promotional material unsuited for lede.
• 06:3706:37, 25 July 2017 diff hist −54‎ Brave New World ‎ I thought it meant it was a hard link which is wasn't. That one minor link points here IS true. But, that's also true for so much in WP that it's wasteful (and silly) to mention. It's just not done at receiving ends of the gazillion+ WP links.
• 05:5905:59, 25 July 2017 diff hist −2‎ Warp drive ‎ "problematic" is opinion, changed to "pertinent". Still, it looks awfully like WP:OR, and doesn't look like it's a summarization from material in main text.
• 04:5504:55, 25 July 2017 diff hist −13‎ Aldous Huxley ‎ →‎United States: subjective, unsourced
• 04:5304:53, 25 July 2017 diff hist −54‎ Brave New World ‎ Commented text seems to be not true or no longer true.
• 04:4904:49, 25 July 2017 diff hist −1‎ Brave New World ‎ Tense -- It still is a NF work, i.e. it still exists.

23 July 2017

• 21:1621:16, 23 July 2017 diff hist −106‎ North Korean famine ‎ →‎Black markets: digression off the topic of the paragraph, uncited WP:OR
• 21:1321:13, 23 July 2017 diff hist 0‎ North Korean famine ‎ →‎Public distribution system: More logical flow to first sentence
• 21:0621:06, 23 July 2017 diff hist −47‎ North Korean famine ‎ →‎Children: Unencyclopedic subjective commentary ("Understandably"). Converted quote (actually a copy from the source) to a paraphrase of the source.
• 21:0121:01, 23 July 2017 diff hist +12‎ North Korean famine ‎ →‎Background: Split single-sentence paragraph into two shorter easier-to-follow sentences. Fixed tense ("forcing" to "forced")
• 20:5920:59, 23 July 2017 diff hist −46‎ North Korean famine ‎ →‎Background: Split and trimmed long digressive sentence.
• 20:5320:53, 23 July 2017 diff hist +9‎ North Korean famine ‎ "Recent research suggests..." is ambiguous ("recent") and as a whole soungs weaselly. Reworded to be more specific about when, etc.. It's OK to list source in text here because we're listing numbers that vary between reliable sources.

21 July 2017

• 05:1905:19, 21 July 2017 diff hist −12‎ Lee Meriwether ‎ →‎1970s: extraneous unsupported description ("best" is also almost always unsupportable - it would need a the results of a current survey which is very hard to come by! :-) )
• 05:1305:13, 21 July 2017 diff hist +4‎ Lee Meriwether ‎ consistent structure (easier to follow in such long lists), more-standard comma usage